RE: Friendly Advice

hello @alovely088. Your story opened well and set the scene nicely. You drew the reader in but the story and character arcs are soft, and your story would have benefited from developing the idea of the Harmattan and the board game since they both formed the backdrop to your story - a bit of explanation via descriptive narrative and dialogue, would have done a lot to bring more understanding to your audience. Your piece has issues relating to duplicated words, mixed tenses, incorrect use of speech marks, and incorrect forms of verbs. Not taking the time to edit your story more carefully has impacted curation significantly.

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