RE: How I Escaped The Wrath of The Protesters | Nonfiction #60
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Every action has consequences and getting involved in politics can be a very messy affair. You are very fortunate that you managed to escaped from the angry mob and the dangerous cobra - narrow escapes on both counts! Sadly the longer term impact forced a complete upheaval and relocation from your home, and the rents still went up. Once elected, we cannot control what government officials will say or do. I have heard it said that democracy comes but once every four years, at the ballot box! I hope you are now living in a much safer area, Ishmael.
I would have liked to have seen some dialogue and interactions between you and the Chairman, and you and the protesters to balance the piece a bit more and help to drive the story forward by showing us the heated emotions and the fear of reprisal. That is, show us how you felt rather than just telling us how you felt. Setting the scene also creates the right atmosphere within which to situate your characters. If the mob was poverty stricken, frustrated, disappointed, and angry, describe them and their appearance, actions and emotions in such a way that this is conveyed, without saying they were frustrated, disappointed and angry.
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